The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
The illustration provided displays the steps of the
process
by which instant
noodles
are produced and packaged.
Overall
,
this
is a multi-stage, man-made
process
that begins with obtaining flour and ends with the packaging of the instant
noodles
.
To begin
, flour is stored in the storage silos, so trucks need to go there and transport the
fluor
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flour
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to the
process
. The
process
begins with mixing water, oil and flour, and
then
, they are placed on rollers so the mass obtained can be carried to the following
pocesses
Correct your spelling
processes
. After all ingredients are mixed, the rollers will transform the mass into dough sheets and
then
into dough strips, so they have the shape of
noodles
. At
this
point, the strips are put on circular discs and they are cooked with oil, when it is done,
the
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they
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are dried. Once the
noodles
are dried, they are put into cups with vegetable and spices packets and
finally
Add a comma
finally,
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they are labelled and sealed.
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