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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph compares four forms in terms of
goods
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 transported in the UK over a period of 28
years
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 from 1974 to 2002.
Overall
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, it is clear from the diagram that the majority of
goods
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 are carried by road
transportations
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transportation
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.
On the other hand
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, pipeline
transportations
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transportation
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 had the lowest amount in the graph.
Moreover
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, the three forms rose with some fluctuations in the time period except rail, which remained quite stable
To begin
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 with,
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goods
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the goods
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 transported
on
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by
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the
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apply
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road figure increased moderately to approximately 80
million
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 from 1974 to 1990.
Then
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, it continued to stay steady
in
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for
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 4
years
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 before increasing significantly to 95 in 2002. Regarding, Water transportation’s quantity witnessed a considerable growth by 27 units from 1978 to 1982 before the figure remained constant at approximately 68
million
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 over the period of 12
years
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 and reached 65
million
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 in 2002.
By contrast
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, the use of rail transportation for carrying
goods
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 was at the same level
with
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as
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 water from 1974 to 1978, amounting to 40
million
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.
Although
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 there were two gradual drops to 30
million
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 in 1986 and 1994,
this
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 data reached 40
million
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 in 2002.
Finally
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,
goods
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 transported by the pipeline data increased substantially from 5 to 25
million
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 before there was a
leveling
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levelling
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 off at 25
million
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 in 12
years
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 and reached over 20
million
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 in 2002.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, years, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Overview
  • Trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Stability
  • Mode of transport
  • Quantity
  • Comparison
  • Goods
  • Transported
  • Significant
  • Noticeable
  • General trend
  • Time span
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