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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line chart illustrates the number of
goods
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 transported in the UK over a period of 28 years from 1974 to 2002 by road, water, rail and pipeline.
Overall
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, as can be clearly
from
Verb problem
seen from
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 the graph that the road was the highest
number
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apply
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among
four
Correct article usage
the four
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 different modes of transport. The pipeline was the smallest amount of
Use synonyms
goods
Fix capitalization
Goods
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 transported. The water and rail have the quantities at equilibrium and and calculated in million tonnes. In
term
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terms
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 of
road’s
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road
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 figures, the
value
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 began at 70M in 1974. There was a significant increase from 70M to 82M between 1974 and 1994. During the period from 1994 to 2002, the ratio of road climbed
substantialy
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substantially
 from 82M to 95M and
gain
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reached
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the
Correct pronoun usage
its
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 highest
value
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.
Additionally
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, in other
goods
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such
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 as water, the price started at 39M in 1974. And
then
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,
this
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 price
jump
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jumped
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 from 39M to 67M in 1982. There was
gradual
Correct article usage
a gradual
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 decrease
drom
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from
 67M to 50M between 1982 and 1998. Over 4 years between 1998 and 2002,
this
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value
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 went up slightly from 50M to 65M. Regarding rail, the cost stood at 40M in 1974. There was
considerable
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a considerable
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 drop from 40M to 30M between 1974 and 1994.
During from
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From
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 1994 to 2002,
this
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 cost
growth
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grew
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 moderately
42M
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by 42M
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. The
last
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goods
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is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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 pipeline,
this
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 rate began at 5M in 1974. There was a significant go up from 5M to 25M between 1974 and 1994. Over 8 years between 1994 to 2002.
This
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value
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remain
Correct subject-verb agreement
remains
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 unchanged and
gain
Correct subject-verb agreement
gains
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 the least number.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, value, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Overview
  • Trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Stability
  • Mode of transport
  • Quantity
  • Comparison
  • Goods
  • Transported
  • Significant
  • Noticeable
  • General trend
  • Time span
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