People used to live in the same city throughout their lives, but now they change where they live several times. What is the cause? Do you think it is a positive or negative trend?
In the past,
people
lived in the same place their whole lives. Nowadays, some individuals
relocate multiple times. In the remainder of this
essay, some causes will be explored and a logical conclusion will be drawn at the end
.
One possible cause of this
trend is the lack of opportunities for young adults. Firstly
, young individuals
in cities with a growing population have a harder time finding work prospects. This
is especially true in smaller areas. For example
, I moved to Panama City at 23 years old because I could not find a job i
my hometown. Correct your spelling
in
Additionally
, as a young person
I found Add a comma
person,
this
city exciting. In contrast
, my father worked for 30 years in same
company. Others move from the countryside to big cities to access higher quality education unavailable in their hometowns. Add an article
the same
Thus
, this
trend allows people
to find options for professional develop
or education.
Another key factor is the natural disasters that occur in certain regions. Replace the word
development
To begin
with, many cities are exposed at
natural risk and after some Change preposition
to
events
many Add a comma
events,
individuals
migrate to other places. For instance
, in Mexico City after the earthquake of 2017
a large number of Add a comma
2017,
people
moved to small towns in order to avoid similar experiences. What is more, thanks to climate change governments expect that many individuals
would
migrate multiple times in order to escape from places with extreme climate conditions. Wrong verb form
will
This
phenomenon can lead to new
wave of migration for humans. Clearly, Add an article
a new
the new
move
to other Change the form of the verb
moving
location
should be positive for Fix the agreement mistake
locations
people
in areas at natural risk.
In conclusion, nowadays people
move frequently driven by many factor
Change the noun form
factors
such
as economic opportunities and natural events. I believe that this
is a positive development because it increases the options of
Change preposition
for
people
to achieve goals and build a better life.Submitted by alequech on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that all paragraphs present a clear main idea and that they all support the overall argument of the essay.
coherence cohesion
Use cohesive devices appropriately to ensure your essay follows a logical sequence, but avoid overuse which can lead to a mechanical feel.
coherence cohesion
Work on sentence structures to avoid run-on sentences or fragments, contributing to the clarity and flow of your paragraphs.
task achievement
It's essential to fully explore and support your main ideas with detailed and relevant examples, ensuring you address all parts of the task.
task achievement
Take the opportunity to showcase a range of vocabulary and grammatical structures to demonstrate your language proficiency.
task achievement
A clear position should be presented and maintained throughout the response. Ensure your opinion is consistent and directly addresses the questions posed.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:
...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?