The graph shows the number of boys and girls playiing sport in an english city town in 2012
The given illustrates
the
several sports (Tennis, Badminton, Cycling, Swimming, Correct article usage
apply
Football
, and Hockey
) played by teenages
in a Correct your spelling
teenagers
Britan
city Correct word choice
British
at
the year Change preposition
in
of
2012.
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apply
Overall
, mens
most Correct your spelling
men's
men
prefered
sport was Correct your spelling
preferred
football
while
women prefered
swimming and Correct your spelling
preferred
boys
participation in the sports Change noun form
boys'
boy's
overall
higher
than ladies. Add a missing verb
was higher
However
, both gender
least Fix the agreement mistake
genders
prefered
sport was Correct your spelling
preferred
hockey
.
In terms of boys, football
was the popular
among other Correct quantifier usage
most popular
phycical
Correct your spelling
physical
activity
which was played by around 60 people. Fix the agreement mistake
activities
Also
, the second highest played activity was tennish about 50 whereas
, almost 40 number of
Correct quantifier usage
apply
mens
Correct your spelling
men
doing
swimming and cycling Verb problem
went
while
badmintan
played by 30 people. Even though their interest Correct your spelling
badminton
not
much in Add a missing verb
was not
hockey
because it was only prefered
by less than 20 individuals.
Correct your spelling
preferred
On the other hand
, around 50 girls' top activity was swimming which was the highest among others while
very
Correct article usage
a very
less
amount of ladies liked Correct word choice
small
hockey
which is less than 10 person
. But they focused on other plays Fix the agreement mistake
people
such
as, badmintan
and tennis were played by almost 40 girls and cycling and Correct your spelling
badminton
football
were participated by around 20.Submitted by n_wara11 on
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