Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging.

A group of people believe that retailers and industries should be responsible
to reduce
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the waste of packing
in
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their
products
. Another group think that the customers should assume
this
resposibility
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responsibility
, by
avoid
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buying goods with a lot of
container
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.
Firstly
, it is a fact that materials used to pack
products
that people buy
on
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everyday-life
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,
such
as paper or plastic,
is
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a
critial
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critical
problem
to
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the environment. These
kind
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of materials normally are non-biodegradable and the final destination can be rivers, oceans, and forests. The people who understand that only the companies have the responsibility to decrease the
amount
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of boxes of goods
has
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some reason because these enterprises
planning
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, design, make, and sell the
products
in a way to obtain the maximum
of
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profit
that is
possible.
Thus
, there is
few
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preocupation
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preoccupation
with the destination for the waste of packaging.
In contrast
, the second point of view is right too, just because the clients
that
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decide what to buy and from whom. Thereby, if customers choose
purschasing
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purchasing
products
from vendors that provide ecological boxes and packs, the
manufacters
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manufacturers
and marts will follow
this
trend. In conclusion, I
belive
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that both ways of thinking are
valids
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valid
and
interdependents
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interdependent
interdependence
. Sellers and buyers together have the responsibility to reuse, reduce, and recycle
products
’ packaging, whether producing or requiring sustainable packaging or no packaging. A lot of goods do not really need a pack, but they are only used for sales appeal or convenience. For me,
to combine
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the
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efforts with cooperation
are
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the best manner to get sustainable practices and
to
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avoid
contaminate
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the environment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Eco-friendly
  • Carbon footprint
  • Excessive packaging
  • Biodegradable materials
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Consumer advocacy
  • Environmental stewardship
  • Waste reduction
  • Recycling initiatives
  • Green practices
  • Minimalist lifestyle
  • Resource conservation
  • Sustainable consumption
  • Packaging alternatives
  • Regulatory measures
  • Ethical choices
  • Environmental impact assessment
  • Renewable resources
  • Compostable packaging
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