Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of Money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
There are times in life when we as humanity face hard situations and make lifetime decisions.
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think accepting difficult circumstances is more appealing, others argue that trying and ameliorate the Use synonyms
situation
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essay will argue both sides of the argument.
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and move on with their lives because they do not want to leave their comfort zones and push themselves into an unknown future or it is just their life is not convenient for making any difference. Use synonyms
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the money shortage or just to fear being unemployed and cannot replace the job with a better one. Linking Words
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who think that if the current Use synonyms
situation
is bad we need to consider it diligently and try to improve it for a better outcome because we came into Use synonyms
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life to discover and create the best of ourselves. Even if the circumstances are not favorable we can move step by step to make it proper for taking risks. Linking Words
For instance
, two years ago I was living with my family which is making me really unhappy and working in a medical company with a low salary. I wanted to rent my own apartment but I cannot because I haven’t got any savings. Because my family does not want me to leave they are not supporting me either. Linking Words
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I decided to start saving money for the apartment by taking extra working time at my company. Four months later, I got a promotion owing to my hard work and Linking Words
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renting my own house with my new high salary. Linking Words
Moreover
, the saving for the apartment became unnecessary so I gifted myself with a Chanel bag.
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situation
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argue it is more convenient to stay in their comfort zone, others think that we need to try and bring out the best of us. I strongly believe that taking risks is more beneficial in the long run.Use synonyms
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that supporting sentences are directly related to the topic of the paragraph. Your essay has a good structure, but consider developing each point more thoroughly than provided.
task achievement
It is necessary to cover all parts of the task. While the essay attempts to discuss both views and provide an opinion, the development of these views is slightly unbalanced. Include equal discussion on both perspectives and ensure that your opinion is clear and well-supported throughout.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.