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The chart below shows the different level of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.

The chart below shows the different level of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.
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The bar graph provides information on the figure of males and females who held five levels of post-school qualifications in Australia in the year 1999, measured in percentages.
Overall
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, men got the lion's share in skilled vocational diplomas, postgraduate diplomas, and master's degrees.
In contrast
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, women have a higher portion of undergraduate diplomas and bachelor's degrees.
Firstly
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, the skilled vocational diploma had the widest gap with male domination, leaving only one-tenth of the total percentage for the opposing gender.
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, postgraduate recorded a 70 to 30 ratio for men and women respectively,
whereas
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 the latter gender who held a master's degree accounted for only two-thirds of the male group.
On the other hand
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, the scale of the undergraduate credentials holders was the negation of postgraduate with the exception of a 5% difference for the minority group.
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, the bachelor's degree proportion had a tight gap where females took up half of the total percentage
while
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 males were approximately a mere five from the female ratio.

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