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The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps
shows
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show
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 the changes which
had
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took
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 taken
of
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in
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 a museum
an
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for an
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 eleven-year
of
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apply
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period between 1998 and 2008. In
generally
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general
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, an interesting thing is that Permanent Exhibition Rooms had been
knocking
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knocked
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 down in 2008, there
were
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apply
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used to be more in 1998. It had been more
convenience
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convenient
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 to spend time at the museum than before. Another interesting change is that
Restaurant
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the Restaurant
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 had been built
on
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in
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 part of
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the north-west
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north-west
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northwest
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 area and café was next to
Restaurant
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the Restaurant
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 which was renovated
little
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a little
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 bit smaller,
however
 sitting area had been introduced at
Garden
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the Garden
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.
In addition
, a
fountains
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fountain
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 was placed
at
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in
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Garden
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the Garden
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, which had been useful in
Garden
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the Garden
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 area. Another development thing is that
Temporary
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the Temporary
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 Exhibition Room
had
Wrong verb form
has
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 been expanded. Some facilities had been replaced,
such
 as Bags and Coats, shops and WC.
On the other hand
,
Garden
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the Garden
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 had been developing,
however
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however,
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 it had not been relocated and
TICKETS
Correct article usage
the TICKETS
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 Entrance/ Exit had not been moved
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to other
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other
Correct quantifier usage
another
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 place.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words garden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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