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The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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This
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 two images illustrate how the
museum
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 has changed over
years
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the years
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,
since
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from
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 1998 to 2008. As it can be seen, the
museum
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 has been through major changes, keeping
though
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apply
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the main structure
at
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in
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 the middle of the
museum
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. One of the
mainly notice
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change
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changes
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 has been the construction of a new restaurant situated
at
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to
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 the north-west just
at
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to
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 the left of the old café, nowadays they put up a terrace
wich
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which
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 is called
café
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the café
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 sitting area
at
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 the garden. The temporary exhibition room has been relocated
at
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 the middle-west of the
museum
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, the old location of it was replaced by the bags and coats and
also
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 the shop, which
at
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in
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 the old days was located
at
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on
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 the right side of the plan. Another striking change is that they have decorated the garden
wich
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which
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 at
this
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 time has two fountains and a sitting area.
At
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In
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 1998 the toilet was situated
at
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in
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 the south-east of the
museum
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 just close to the shop and the plan, near to the café.
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 the
museum
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 has relocated many shops but
keep
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kept
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 the main structure.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rectangular shape
  • central garden area
  • symmetrically arranged
  • expanded galleries
  • visitor flow management
  • temporary exhibition space
  • permanent gallery
  • visitor facilities
  • customer service focus
  • dedicated children's area
  • expanded restroom facilities
  • museum gardens
  • unoccupied outdoor space
  • shift towards long-term exhibits
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