With the fast pace of modern life more and more people are turning towards fast food for their main meals. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages

In the past decade technology and
internet
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the internet
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has
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changed our
live
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. People have become lazier in all aspects and the reason is that they don’t have enough time to prepare their own
dish
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instead
of eating fast
food
. That’s why the majority of people have become outweighed. In
this
essay I will examine both advantages and disadvantages with their vital points and in the end, I will give my own point of view. First and foremost, the reason why society chooses fast
food
is that it will save time.
Moreover
, it is very complicated to prepare and
also
in some countries
such
as the USA cooking prices are
more prices
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higher
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than fast
food
.
For instance
, if someone is willing to cook, he needs to go
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grocery store to pick up
ingredients
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that
require
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and
also
, he needs to know how to combine recipes
and
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all these procedures will take a lot of effort and energy.
Nevertheless
, precooked
food
has many drawbacks as well, one of the big cons is being overweight. Usually, those kinds of
food
contain a huge amount of sugar, oil, fat and chemicals to make them look tasty.
Furthermore
, gaining too much weight causes serious health problems
such
as diabetes, high blood pressure,
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struggle to breathe.
In addition
, if the body doesn’t receive enough nutrients, it is difficult to be healthy and fit. In conclusion, there have been only a few advantages of eating
take away
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takeaway
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foods
such
as saving time and steering clear
cooking
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difficulties.
However
, when consuming the meal, it doesn’t have any benefit for your health and even consuming
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long
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term might kill people. In my opinion, eating moderate junk
food
,
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2 times a month will definitely not affect your body.
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Ensure that paragraphs are clearly divided and structured with introductory sentences, supporting details, and concluding remarks. Develop coherence by linking ideas smoothly, and cohesion can be improved by using a range of linking words and phrases effectively throughout the essay.
Task Achievement
Effectively address all parts of the task, ensuring a balanced discussion of advantages and disadvantages with clear, comprehensive ideas supported by relevant, specific examples. Each point made should be developed sufficiently to demonstrate an understanding of the topic and to support your position.

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