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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket(s) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket(s) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The below picture shows Garlsdon
city
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City
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. A supermarket will be added to the
town
, and Two locations are proposed for it.
Overally
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Overall
, the two sites that are
desined
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designed
destined
, geographically are in
immence
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immense
diferences
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differences
,
while
 one of them is planned to be
at
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in
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 the middle of the
town
, the other is suggested to be in the countryside. The suggested place
at
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in
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town
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the town
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center
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centre
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 is slightly inclining to the
soth
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south
other
 cities but the countryside one is
more near
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nearer
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 to
the
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apply
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Hindton. The first place planned for
supermarket
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the supermarket
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,
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 is outside the housing and industry area. in
the
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favour of the railway and main roads, it conveyed to the
north_west
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northwest
 of the
town
, beside the 12 km of Hindun,
although
 there is another way to connect it to
town
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the town
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center
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centre
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 and Cranston. The second area which is under assessment to be built, is at the center of the
town
,
has
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and has
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 various accesses to housing and industry facilities. In
this
 proposed location, there are main roads reached to Bransdon and Crandsdon,
moreover
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moreover,
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 a railway is another way to connect
supermarket
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the supermarket
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 to Cranston.
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