IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4

You recently attended a training course for your work. Your employer has asked you for your feedback on the training course. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter remind your employer what the course was about explain why the course was useful to you in your work suggest why the course may not be suitable for some of your other colleagues

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Dear sir: I am writing to express how I am glad by completed a training course on
Bioinformatic
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 cooperation between our organisation and
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 city of technology. Bioinformatic is abroad science based on
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biology and a computer
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advance-software
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software
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sequences of
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human DNA,
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technology
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new method of analysis and discoveries
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 rare diseases on human based on
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molecular
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computer
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software which I haven’t a background
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. It will be a beneficial touch if we use
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 the organisation.
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 the patient results.
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 competition
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has a positive impact on
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 reputation.
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medical collogues Since it depends on
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 information more than
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the computer
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 field. I hope my
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email covers all about the training course and contact me if you need more details Looking forward to your response. Greeting yours
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single idea per paragraph
Ensure that each paragraph contains a single, clear idea and use appropriate paragraphing consistently. Avoid mixing unrelated ideas within the same paragraph.
logical structure
Use more cohesive devices, such as conjunctions, pronouns, and discourse markers, to improve the flow of information and ideas between sentences and paragraphs.
greeting and closing
Be sure to use a polite and respectful tone throughout the letter, including an appropriate greeting and sign-off that conform to formal letter writing conventions.
complete response
Address all parts of the task with adequate development of ideas. Endeavor to provide a more thorough explanation for each point and expand on how the course benefits you as well as why it may not be suitable for others.
suitable writing tone
Choose a tone suitable for professional correspondence. Remain consistent in formality and avoid casual language or overly personal expressions in a letter to an employer.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Training program
  • Skill enhancement
  • Job responsibilities
  • Practical exercises
  • Hands-on experience
  • Operational efficiency
  • Subject matter
  • Prerequisites
  • Specialized knowledge
  • Teaching methodology
  • Learning preferences
  • Feedback
  • Course facilitator
  • Professional development
  • Engagement
  • Interactive components
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