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The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
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The two maps show the main changes which have taken
place
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 in the
museum
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 between
the
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1998 and 2008. In general, it appears that the
museum
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 has become a much more modern
place
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, with a new café sitting area and fountains. One interesting change is that the shop and bags and coats
place
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have
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 been changed to the other side of the
museum
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. Another striking change is that the temporary exhibition room has been built bigger. Over
this
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room
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 there is nowadays a restaurant. The garden became new fountains and a café sitting area. Another replacement has taken
place
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 in the
museum
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 within the toilets. In the present
day
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 they are right by the café. Two things did not have changed, the permanent exhibition rooms and the entrance/exit are
on
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 the same
place
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 now as in 1998.
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 the garden is
on
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 the same
place
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 as 1998, but with little changes and modernizations.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words place, museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rectangular shape
  • central garden area
  • symmetrically arranged
  • expanded galleries
  • visitor flow management
  • temporary exhibition space
  • permanent gallery
  • visitor facilities
  • customer service focus
  • dedicated children's area
  • expanded restroom facilities
  • museum gardens
  • unoccupied outdoor space
  • shift towards long-term exhibits
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