The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course.The table shows the salaries of anthropologists in work after five years.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course.The table shows the salaries of anthropologists in work after five years.
While
the provided pie chart demonstrates what path alumni of one particular university, studying Anthropology, took after graduating,  the table illustrates statistical data regarding the amount of income they earned after five years.
Overall
, what stands out from the given information is that over half of all graduates went on to
work
full time,
whereas
the majority of them are reported to have made more than  100,000 dollars, respectively. Of
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particular note is that only a minority of former Anthropology students chose to both
work
and continue their studies. Looking at the pie chart in more detail, it is evident that the proportion of those pursuing
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education was at 8% as those who had no record about their destination,
although
with a 3% difference, the number of
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workers and the unemployed
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quite similar, the former accounting for 15 % and the latter making up 12 %. It is noteworthy that over 10 times more former students decide to find full-time
work
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52 % compared to
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5 % of graduates choosing to
work
part time
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and
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further
their education simultaneously. With regard to their salaries five years later,
while
only one-fifth of freelance consultants made from 25,000 to 75,000 dollars, a significantly higher proportion of the same workers (80%) earned more than 75,000 dollars.
Similarly
, the same statistics were true for those employed in the government sector.
By contrast
, the discrepancy between those making up to 75,000 and over was only 10 % in
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of the latter with a ratio of 45 % to 55.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • anthropology graduates
  • undergraduate degree
  • part-time work
  • full-time work
  • postgraduate study
  • unemployment
  • career trends
  • employment opportunities
  • flexibility
  • specialization
  • competitive job market
  • salary
  • earning potential
  • private sector
  • government sector
  • freelance work
  • public policy
  • cultural preservation
  • consulting
  • corporate anthropology
  • expertise
  • accrued
  • distribution
  • sector
  • trend
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