The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates export earnings in different categories over a period of two years,
while
the table illustrates the variation of
the Change preposition
in
value
these
categories.
Change preposition
of these
Overall
, it is noticeable that the income during both years are
very similar, Correct subject-verb agreement
is
while
all products
value
increased, except for germs and jewellery.
Petroleum products
had the highest value
in both years, with $60 billion
and approximately $62 billion
respectively. While
engineered goods in 2015 had $58 billion
sales
, in 2016 Change preposition
in sales
it
almost overtook petroleum Correct pronoun usage
they
products
with $61 billion
. Germs and jewerly
decreased from $42 Correct your spelling
jewellery
billion
to $40 billion
. Moreover
, textile
had the lowest earnings with around $26 Fix the agreement mistake
textiles
billion
, but in 2016 ties
with agricultural Wrong verb form
tied
products
, which remained relatively stable over the period, with just above $30 billion
.
Textiles had the largest variation in its value
, a change of 15,24%, which almost double
the second category with the largest change, engineered goods, which had a variation of 8.5%. Wrong verb form
doubled
Petrolium
Correct your spelling
Petroleum
products
increased by 3% between 2015 and 2016 and the change of
agricultural Change preposition
in
products
is almost negligible. Finally
, germs and jewellery were the only products
which
Correct pronoun usage
whose
value
decreased, by 5.18%.Submitted by elenazheng1211 on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words value, products, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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