The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates export earnings in different categories over a period of two years,
while
the table illustrates the variation Linking Words
of
the Change preposition
in
value
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these
categories.
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of these
Overall
, it is noticeable that the income during both years Linking Words
are
very similar, Correct subject-verb agreement
is
while
all Linking Words
products
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value
increased, except for germs and jewellery.
Petroleum Use synonyms
products
had the highest Use synonyms
value
in both years, with $60 Use synonyms
billion
and approximately $62 Use synonyms
billion
respectively. Use synonyms
While
engineered goods in 2015 had $58 Linking Words
billion
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sales
, in 2016 Change preposition
in sales
it
almost overtook petroleum Correct pronoun usage
they
products
with $61 Use synonyms
billion
. Germs and Use synonyms
jewerly
decreased from $42 Correct your spelling
jewellery
billion
to $40 Use synonyms
billion
. Use synonyms
Moreover
, Linking Words
textile
had the lowest earnings with around $26 Fix the agreement mistake
textiles
billion
, but in 2016 Use synonyms
ties
with agricultural Wrong verb form
tied
products
, which remained relatively stable over the period, with just above $30 Use synonyms
billion
.
Textiles had the largest variation in its Use synonyms
value
, a change of 15,24%, which almost Use synonyms
double
the second category with the largest change, engineered goods, which had a variation of 8.5%. Wrong verb form
doubled
Petrolium
Correct your spelling
Petroleum
products
increased by 3% between 2015 and 2016 and the change Use synonyms
of
agricultural Change preposition
in
products
is almost negligible. Use synonyms
Finally
, germs and jewellery were the only Linking Words
products
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which
Correct pronoun usage
whose
value
decreased, by 5.18%.Use synonyms
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