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Literacy has traditionally been viewed as largely a third world problem. Discuss possible causes for this and its effect on society.

#literacy #third #world #effect #society
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The essay you have written does not constitute a complete response as it appears to be a collection of sentence starters and disjointed ideas rather than a cohesive essay. To improve, you need to create paragraphs that contain a single main idea, followed by explanations, elaborations, and examples. A well-structured essay should have a clear introduction with a thesis statement, developed body paragraphs, and a conclusive paragraph that summarises your points.
coherence cohesion
The coherence and cohesion of your essay are significantly lacking. Coherence can be improved by ensuring that your essay has a logical flow of ideas, with clear connections between them. Cohesion can be enhanced by using a range of cohesive devices properly (linking words, referencing, substitution, etc.) to tie your ideas together. Make sure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that the sentences within it are logically ordered and well connected.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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