The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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provides
information about how many per Change the verb form
provide
cent
used transports in Edmonton, Use synonyms
while
people's reasons for using the car in town.
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, the car on the pie charts shows most majority results than Linking Words
other mechanism
. Change the wording
another mechanism
other mechanisms
Although
, table process the commute to work most activity using in Linking Words
city
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the city
However
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exception
in the table shopping and leisure activities Fix the agreement mistake
exceptions
very
similar Add a missing verb
are very
cent
.
First of all, the presented diagram gives the proportion of by car 45% and LRT 35%. And we can lowest rate, it is Use synonyms
bus
and as adjective as taxi 10%. The LRT 35% and bus 10% together seen costing.
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a bus
the bus
process
table gives that commute to work by the far biggest result Correct article usage
the process
fifty five
per Add a hyphen
fifty-five
cent
. And slightly different from between 5 %, there are taking children to school 40% and business 40%. The together rates the taking children to school and shopping the same as Use synonyms
commute
to work 55 Wrong verb form
commuting
Use synonyms
cent
.Change to a plural noun
cents
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