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The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts
provides
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 information about how many per
cent
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 used transports in Edmonton,
while
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 people's reasons for using the car in town.
Overall
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, the car on the pie charts shows most majority results than
other mechanism
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another mechanism
other mechanisms
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.
Although
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, table process the commute to work most activity using in
city
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the city
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However
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,
exception
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exceptions
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 in the table shopping and leisure activities
very
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are very
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 similar
cent
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. First of all, the presented diagram gives the proportion of by car 45% and LRT 35%. And we can lowest rate, it is
bus
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a bus
the bus
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 and as adjective as taxi 10%. The LRT 35% and bus 10% together seen costing. In general,
process
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the process
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 table gives that commute to work by the far biggest result
fifty five
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fifty-five
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 per
cent
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. And slightly different from between 5 %, there are taking children to school 40% and business 40%. The together rates the taking children to school and shopping the same as
commute
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commuting
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 to work 55 
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cent
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cents
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transportation modes
  • car ownership
  • proportion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • transportation habits
  • environmental awareness
  • government policies
  • public transport infrastructure
  • urban planning
  • congestion
  • environmental quality
  • future implications
  • adapt
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