The pie charts show the number of hours spent in a British university library by undergraduates, postgraduates and the total student population.

The pie charts show the number of hours spent in a British university library by undergraduates, postgraduates and the total student population.
The pie chart
illustrate
Change the verb form
illustrates
show examples
how many hours
spent
Add a missing verb
were spent
show examples
in a British university library by
undergraduates
,
postgraduates
Correct word choice
and postgraduates
show examples
and the total
sudent
Correct your spelling
student
population.
Overall
,
it is clear that
postgraduates spent more time in
library
Add an article
the library
show examples
than all students and
undergraduates
.
For example
,the overwhelming majority of people spent more time than 37 per
cent
undergraduates
Change preposition
of undergraduates
show examples
.The figures were one in three and about one in four, respectively.
Futhermore
Correct your spelling
Furthermore
, only 9 per
cent
of
undergraduates
spent fifteen hours in
library
Add an article
the library
show examples
,
whereas
the postgraduates in
this
category
is
Change the verb form
are
show examples
just under
one half
Add a hyphen
one-half
show examples
. Meanwhile, all students at university
spent
Wrong verb form
spend
show examples
as many hours as
undergraduates
. Most students spent eight or more time(50 per
cent
).
However
,the
last
fifty per
cent
used up 1 to seven
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
are fewer than
undergraduates
which are a hefty 63 per
cent
.
Submitted by dnm.best on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words undergraduates, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: