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The pie charts show the number of hours spent in a British university library by undergraduates, postgraduates and the total student population.

The pie charts show the number of hours spent in a British university library by undergraduates, postgraduates and the total student population.
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There are three pie charts which illustrate how many
hours
 in a British
unuversity
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university
 library by undergraduates,
postgraduates
, and
amonut
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amount
 of all
students
.
Overall
, we can
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note is
 that
postgraduates
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postgraduate
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students
 spent much more time than it's spent by undergraduates and all
students
. It is clear from the data that over
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50 per
cent
 of
postgraduates
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postgraduate
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students
 waste fifteen plus
hours
,
while
undergraduates
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undergraduate
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students
who are
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spent
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spend
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 the same range of time
modest
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 9 per
cent
.
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Furthermore
, exactly half of all
students
 spent one to 7
hours
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almost
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 of
postgraduates
 who spent the
identical
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same
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 time. Meanwhile, for
undergarduates
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undergraduate
undergraduates
students
 the states take shape slightly
diferent
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differently
. Most of them spent about one to 14
hours
 (91 per
cent
) which is far
fewer
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less
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comparison
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 with
other
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the other
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 two groups.
Moreover
, the percentage of
students
 who spent eight to 14
hours
 is nearly similar for all three groups
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with
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avrage
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average
 is just below 33 per
cent
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, postgraduates, students, cent with synonyms.
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