The two pie charts illustrates the proportion of male and females in employment that are divided into six different field of occupations and are equally divided to manual and non-manual category in Great Britain in the year 1992.
The two pie charts
illustrates
how many males and females are employed in Change the verb form
illustrate
the
similar areas of jobs.
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First,
what attracts attention, that
the vast majority of both groups Add a missing verb
is that
works
by Change the verb form
work
managerials
and professionals.
And the figures are close - 29 per Correct your spelling
managers
cent
for women and thirty six
per Add a hyphen
thirty-six
cent
for men respectively. But when we are talking about Craft or similar, the difference is huge. Only three in hundred
females in comparison with just under one quarter of males Correct article usage
a hundred
employ
there, Wrong verb form
employed
that is
clear. And vice versa - in clerical and related, close to third
are women and only 6 per Correct article usage
a third
cent
are men.
And the tiny minority of both are working by General laborers
- 1 and two per Change the spelling
labourers
cent
.
When we are analyzing the division in each sex area independent of others by ascend
, we see the next patterns:
- male - the first three Change the verb form
ascending
place
are managerial and professional, Fix the agreement mistake
places
than
Other manual are going and the Replace the word
then
last
are craft or similar.
- female - the overwhelming majority are clerical or related with
managerial and professional and other manual.Change preposition
to
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