The table shows the average salaries in US dollars in five countries at different stages until achieving the maximum salary.

The table shows the average salaries in US dollars in five countries at different stages until achieving the maximum salary.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The table shows the average salaries in US dollars in five countries at different stages until achieving the maximum salary.
The table illustrates the average salaries in US dollars in five countries at the
sarting
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starting
point and 15
years
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after,
along with
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the maximum
salary
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and the number of
years
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to reach it.
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, the salaries in Luxembourg were
highest
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whereas
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their
Australia
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Australian
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counterpart accounted for the lowest figure in all sectors. The starting salaries in Australia and Korea were relatively similar, standing at 28000$ and 30000 $, respectively. After 15
years
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, both figures increased to 48000 $ and
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was
also
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the maximum
salary
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in Australia because it only took 9
years
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to get the highest
paid
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in
this
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country.
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,
employer
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employers
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in Korea had to spend 34
years
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to reach the average highest
salary
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, at 62000$. In Japan, the
salary
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started at 34000$, compared with 45000$ in Denmark.
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, the average
salary
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in Japan experienced a more significant rise to 65000$ after 15
years
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, and
this
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number can reach
the
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a
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peak
at
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86000$ after 37
years
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. It took the
least
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last
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years
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to get the maximum
salary
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in Denmark, with 54000$ after only 8
year
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years
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. In terms of Luxembourg, the
salary
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starts at 80000$, which was considerably higher than that in other studied countries.
This
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number went up to 119000$ after 15
years
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and reached the highest point at 132000$ after 30
years
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, salary with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 4 times.
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