The diagrams below show changes that have taken place in the Sawry District neighbourhood since 1920. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two maps illustrate the changes in the same neighbourhood in the Sawry District in the

last

century.

Overall

, the Tulebug Bros building

got

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was

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replaced with

Yang

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the Yang

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office.

Additionally

, the primary

school

expanded to be larger than the old

school

Furthermore

, the whole neighbourhood faced a significant

grow

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growth

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in apartments, houses and shops.

To begin

with,

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the north

side

of Oak Avenue, the Yang office complex replaced the large factory Tulebug Bros in the west area.

Moreover

, there is a new bridge that crosses the Elmwood

river

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River

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connected with the same road from Oak Avenue.

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south

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the south

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side

of Oak Avenue, there is

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apply

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major

changes

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change

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happened

such

as the Lonoco Petrol station and the new Prestwich primary

school

that is

located

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the east

side

of Miller's Lake.

Additionally

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apply

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new two apartments

along with

a new shop were built

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show examples

the north

side

of the primary

school

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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, side with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

150 words

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Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. Do you agree or disagree?

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