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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps below compare the current layout of a public
park
 and when it was opened in 1920.
Overall
, the
park
 nowadays
look
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 extremely different from 1920, new areas were added and others were removed. The fountain was removed from the central area,
instead
, there is a
rose
garden
 in the middle of the
park
.
Also
, the places where people could sit before were moved to the central area, surrounding the
rose
garden
.
Furthermore
, the
rose
garden
 which was at the left of the entrance
in
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to
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 Ardon Avenue, now is a café. Next to the
café
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café,
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 there
is
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was
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 a playing area for children, which
it
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apply
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was a pond for water plants. The
rose
garden
 and seats in the south-west of the
park
 were removed, and where there was a stage for musicians, now is an amphitheatre for concerts.
Finally
, at the left of the entrance
in
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to
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 Eldon Street, where there was a glasshouse that now turned
to
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into
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 a water feature, which is at the right of an
entrace
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entrance
 of
underground
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the underground
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 car
park
.
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For task achievement, thoroughly address all parts of the task. Make sure to summarize the important differences and developments clearly, and provide adequate detail where necessary. Avoid generalizations and focus on specific, relevant examples.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alterations
  • renovations
  • modernize
  • upgraded
  • transformed
  • landscaping
  • facilities
  • amenities
  • preservation
  • heritage
  • green spaces
  • eco-friendly
  • public space
  • community impact
  • historical elements
  • conservation
  • recreational areas
  • urban planning
  • sustainable development
  • layout
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