The line graph shows the proportion of students aged 18-25 studying in the universities of Singapore, Malaysia, Philippines and Thailand from 1961 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the proportion of students aged 18-25 studying in the universities of Singapore, Malaysia, Philippines and Thailand from 1961 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart gives the proportion of
students
who are between 18 and 25
year
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years
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olds
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old
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,and study in universities in four nations
called
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Singapore
,
Malaysia
, Philippines and Thailand in year 1961 to 2011.
Overall
, it can be seen that the highest country which
students
ages 18 to 25 years was
Singapore
. But the lowest was
Malaysia
.
To begin
with,
Singapore
was
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40
million
students
.
at
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year
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the year
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2011.
In contrast
, in 1961
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there was
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was
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were
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only 15
million
students
. Followed by Thailand and
Philippines
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the Philippines
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were
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about 42
million
and 19
million
respectively. But in
Malaysia
was only 15
million
. For
Singapore
, the percentage
was
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sharply increased from 15 to 30
million
in
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from
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1961 to 1971.
And in
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In
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Thailand, the percentage
was highly rising
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rose
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between 1991 and 2011 from 20
million
to 42
million
.
However
, in
Malaysia
, the number was stable from 1991 to 2011 at 15
million
,but from 1961 to 1991 the percentage was growth from about 2
million
to 15
millions
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million
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, singapore, malaysia, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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  • proportion
  • higher education
  • trend
  • contrast
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • plateau
  • governmental policies
  • economic situations
  • cultural attitudes
  • education growth
  • correlation
  • historical events
  • political events
  • projection
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