The line graph shows the proportion of students aged 18-25 studying in the universities of Singapore, Malaysia, Philippines and Thailand from 1961 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line chart gives the proportion of

students

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who are between 18 and 25

year

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olds

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,and study in universities in four nations

called

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Singapore

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Malaysia

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, Philippines and Thailand in year 1961 to 2011.

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, it can be seen that the highest country which

students

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ages 18 to 25 years was

Singapore

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. But the lowest was

Malaysia

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with,

Singapore

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was

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million

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students

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apply

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year

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the year

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2011.

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, in 1961

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there was

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was

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only 15

million

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students

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. Followed by Thailand and

Philippines

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the Philippines

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were

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about 42

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and 19

million

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respectively. But in

Malaysia

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was only 15

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. For

Singapore

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, the percentage

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sharply increased from 15 to 30

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1961 to 1971.

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Thailand, the percentage

was highly rising

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rose

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between 1991 and 2011 from 20

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to 42

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, in

Malaysia

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, the number was stable from 1991 to 2011 at 15

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,but from 1961 to 1991 the percentage was growth from about 2

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to 15

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, singapore, malaysia, million with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
4
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

161 words

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