The charts below show the percentage of volunteers by organizations in 2008 and 2014.

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The pie charts demonstrate the percentage of

participant

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from different organizations in 2008 and 2014.

Overall

it is clear that

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of organizations represents the largest portion of

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, sports, and

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whereas

art, education, and others

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undoubtedly the smallest. Over and above that

health

care

was the least popular throughout 2 years.

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the illustration, the figure of volunteers in 2008, volunteering from educational topped the list with a percentage of 24%, slightly higher than environmental at 21%.

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, the percentage of

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in art

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18%, as

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to 15%

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sports and others. Meanwhile,

volunteers

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work in

health

care

was only amounted to 7%.

On the other hand

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increase in volunteering for environmental and sports organizations exactly 29% and a quarter in 2014. Which is

then

followed by

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around

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17% and art

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%. The lowest was followed by other kinds of volunteering

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with 9%, making it slightly more well-known than

health

care

at just 8%.

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