The charts below show the percentage of volunteers by organizations in 2008 and 2014.

The charts below show the percentage of volunteers by organizations in 2008 and 2014.
The pie charts demonstrate the percentage of
participant
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from different organizations in 2008 and 2014.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the
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of organizations represents the largest portion of
environment
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, sports, and
health
care
,
whereas
art, education, and others
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undoubtedly the smallest. Over and above that
health
care
was the least popular throughout 2 years.
According to
the illustration, the figure of volunteers in 2008, volunteering from educational topped the list with a percentage of 24%, slightly higher than environmental at 21%.
Furthermore
, the percentage of
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in art
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18%, as
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to 15%
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sports and others. Meanwhile,
volunteers
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work in
health
care
was only amounted to 7%.
On the other hand
,
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increase in volunteering for environmental and sports organizations exactly 29% and a quarter in 2014. Which is
then
followed by
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around
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17% and art
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%. The lowest was followed by other kinds of volunteering
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with 9%, making it slightly more well-known than
health
care
at just 8%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words health, care with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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