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the charts below show the percentage of volunteers by organizations in 2008 and 2014

the charts below show the percentage of volunteers by organizations in 2008 and 2014
#show #percentage #volunteers #organizations
The given pie charts
demonstrates
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demonstrate
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 the
changes
 in the number of people
work
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working
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 unpaid by
remain
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remaining
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 association, environment, art,
sport
,
health
 care,
educational
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education
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 and others between 2008 and 2014.
Overall
, it can clearly be seen that almost
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a percent
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percent
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per cent
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in
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of
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 each
organizations
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organization
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 witnessed
a
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a change
changes
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changes
 from 2008 to 2014.
As a result
 half group in 2008
increasing
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increased
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 in 2014, and three other percentages
decreasing
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decreased
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 in the next
year
. In terms of the proportion of volunteers
whose
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who
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 entertained in environmental,
sport
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sports
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 and
health
 care
organizations
 experienced a slight
rose
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rise
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 in the next
year
,
sport
 increased significantly by 10%,
than
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then
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 environmental and
health
 upward slightly from 21 % and 7% to 29% and 8% respectively.
However
, the biggest main
changes
 over the
organizations
 per
volunteer
 was
sport
 and the least was
health
 care
volunteer
. Regarding the other
volunteer
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volunteers
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 that
provide
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provided
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 decline total percentages in each
organizations
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organization
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 in two different
year
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years
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, Art,
educational
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education
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 and other
group
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groups
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was
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apply
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witnessed a significant decline from 2008 to 2014.
Moreover
, art and other
organizations
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organizations'
organization's
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 total
volunteer
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volunteers
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was demonstrates
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demonstrated
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the
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apply
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similar total
changes
by
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of
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 6 percent between 2008 and 2014, beside educational was the main
organizations
was
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apply
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experienced
a
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the
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 biggest decrease in the next
year
 from 24% to 7%.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words changes, sport, health, organizations, year, volunteer with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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