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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pictures compare the
road
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 access to a hospital before and after development in 2007 and 2010.
Overall
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, there had not been too many changes, except
of
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for
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 two new roundabouts, a
car
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park
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 and the bus stop area. The Ring
Road
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 which surrounds the city hospital remained the same in 2010,
while
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 the area
were connect
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connecting
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 Hospital
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road
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Road
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 and Ring
Road
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 was changed to a roundabout.
Also
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, another roundabout was added where Hospital
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road
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Road
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 and City
Road
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 were linked. Both
roundabout
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roundabouts
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 are connected to a bus station
in
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on
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 the
left hand
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left-hand
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side
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 of the Hospital
Road
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. In 2007 there were 6 bus
stop
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stops
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 around Hospital
Road
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, 3
in
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on
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 each
side
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,
in
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on
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 the
right hand
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right-hand
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side
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, there was a
car
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park
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 for staff and
public
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the public
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. In 2010
this
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car
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park
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 was no longer allowed for
public
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the public
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,
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instead
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instead,
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 a new area dedicated
for
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to
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public
Add an article
the public
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car
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park
Wrong verb form
parking
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 was developed
in
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on
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right hand
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right-hand
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side
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 of the Ring
Road
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, which surrounded the city hospital.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, car, park, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic flow
  • road access
  • ring road
  • bus stops
  • bus station
  • congestion
  • parking facilities
  • pedestrian crossings
  • vehicular flow
  • organizational structure
  • accessibility
  • enhancements
  • configuration
  • dedicated
  • diverting traffic
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