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The pie chart illustrates the results of a review conducted by the university of the opinions of full-time and part-time students about services.

The pie chart illustrates the results of a review conducted by the university of the opinions of full-time and part-time students about services.
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All in all, full-time
students
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 have higher percentages in three parts: not at all, quite happy, and very happy for the services at the university,
while
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 part-time
students
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 have the lowest results in three parts for the services from the university.
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 with, full-time
students
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 have a higher percentage, accounting for 87
percent
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per cent
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 of very happy
students
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 in current opening hours, and
this
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 figure is similar for part-time
students
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 at 72%. Trade utilities of part-time
students
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 accounted for more than two-fifths
percent
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per cent
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 of the IT support offered,
although
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 in the same case, full-time
students
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 have percentages around less than a fifth
percent
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On the other hand
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, the lowest percentage comprised almost a quarter of part-time
students
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 who were quite happy during the current opening hours,
whereas
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 full-time
students
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 made up 12% of the current opening hours. Based on the data from all survey results conducted by universities regarding services, full-time
students
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 get the highest answers using three categories,
while
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 the lowest is among part-time
students
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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