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The chart shows the global proportions of different types of energy produced annually. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the global proportions of different types of energy produced annually. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The percentage of annual global
electricity
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production
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 is
ullistrated
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illustrated
 in the pie chart below. The figures show that there are three main segments on the graph. Other types of
energy
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 are less than 10% of all
production
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 of the year. Looking
to
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at
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the propotions
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propotions
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proportions
 of various types of
energy
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, it is
obivious
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obvious
 that coal is
the
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dominant among others and recorded as 39%. The predominant positions are natural gas and hydro, presented as 25% and 20% respectively. Another three types of
energy
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 are nuclear, oil and other, followed by less
that
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than
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 10%
from
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of
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 all
anual
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annual
electricity
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production
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. The biggest among them is nuclear
energy
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,
otherwise
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 oil and other
energy
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 recorded as 5% only.
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 the information on the graph of
annual
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the annual
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production
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 of
electricity
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, the biggest
propotion
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proportion
 of global
electricity
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 is specified as coal.
On the other hand
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, the smallest percentage is presented as oil.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, production, energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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