The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table below illustrates how some people who did not yet get a job in the United Kingdom spent their time on some activities
last
year divided into four categories.
Overall
, it is clearly seen that the most favourite activity by
women
is doing housework, and
men
, most likely do job hunting.
To begin
with,
women
category divided into 2 categories which morning
women
and
afternoon
women
. For
women
starting their activity in the morning, 49% of them do housework to fill their time. The same condition
also
happened to
afternoon
women
, there are 21% of them doing housework as well.
Otherwise
, both morning
women
and
afternoon
women
dislike playing sports and drinking
,
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because only 1% of them conduct these activities.
On the other hand
,
men
are
also
divided into 2 classifications as well, consisting of morning
men
and
afternoon
men
. Most mornings
men
spend their time cleaning the house, shopping, and job hunting,
while
in the
afternoon
men
prefer to watch television and do gardening.
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