The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table below illustrates how some people who did not yet get a job in the United Kingdom spent their time on some activities
last
year divided into four categories.
Overall
, it is clearly seen that the most favourite activity by women
is doing housework, and men
, most likely do job hunting.
To begin
with, women
category divided into 2 categories which morning women
and afternoon
women
. For women
starting their activity in the morning, 49% of them do housework to fill their time. The same condition also
happened to afternoon
women
, there are 21% of them doing housework as well. Otherwise
, both morning women
and afternoon
women
dislike playing sports and drinking,
because only 1% of them conduct these activities.
Remove the comma
apply
On the other hand
, men
are also
divided into 2 classifications as well, consisting of morning men
and afternoon
men
. Most mornings men
spend their time cleaning the house, shopping, and job hunting, while
in the afternoon
men
prefer to watch television and do gardening.Submitted by zefanyagyu on
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