The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table below illustrates how some people who did not yet get a job in the United Kingdom spent their time on some activities
last
year divided into four categories.
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Overall
, it is clearly seen that the most favourite activity by Linking Words
women
is doing housework, and Use synonyms
men
, most likely do job hunting.
Use synonyms
To begin
with, Linking Words
women
category divided into 2 categories which morning Use synonyms
women
and Use synonyms
afternoon
Use synonyms
women
. For Use synonyms
women
starting their activity in the morning, 49% of them do housework to fill their time. The same condition Use synonyms
also
happened to Linking Words
afternoon
Use synonyms
women
, there are 21% of them doing housework as well. Use synonyms
Otherwise
, both morning Linking Words
women
and Use synonyms
afternoon
Use synonyms
women
dislike playing sports and drinkingUse synonyms
,
because only 1% of them conduct these activities.
Remove the comma
apply
On the other hand
, Linking Words
men
are Use synonyms
also
divided into 2 classifications as well, consisting of morning Linking Words
men
and Use synonyms
afternoon
Use synonyms
men
. Most mornings Use synonyms
men
spend their time cleaning the house, shopping, and job hunting, Use synonyms
while
in the Linking Words
afternoon
Use synonyms
men
prefer to watch television and do gardening.Use synonyms
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, men, afternoon with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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