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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table below illustrates how some people who did not yet get a job in the United Kingdom spent their time on some activities
last
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 year divided into four categories.
Overall
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, it is clearly seen that the most favourite activity by
women
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 is doing housework, and
men
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, most likely do job hunting.
To begin
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 with,
women
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 category divided into 2 categories which morning
women
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 and
afternoon
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women
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. For
women
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 starting their activity in the morning, 49% of them do housework to fill their time. The same condition
also
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 happened to
afternoon
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women
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, there are 21% of them doing housework as well.
Otherwise
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, both morning
women
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 and
afternoon
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women
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 dislike playing sports and drinking
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 because only 1% of them conduct these activities.
On the other hand
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,
men
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 are
also
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 divided into 2 classifications as well, consisting of morning
men
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 and
afternoon
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men
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. Most mornings
men
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 spend their time cleaning the house, shopping, and job hunting,
while
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 in the
afternoon
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men
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 prefer to watch television and do gardening.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, men, afternoon with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "divided" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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