The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph below illustrates the proportion of owned and rented houses in England and Wales over a period of 93
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.
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, there are more rented
households
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than owned in all the
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except for 1971. Before 1971 the
number
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of owned
households
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decreased over the
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, and
after
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this
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year, it started to increase. In 1918 there were approximately 78% rented
household
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households
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and 22% owned houses. In the next two
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the proportion remained stable at 69% and 31% for rented and owned
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respectively. Between 1953 and 1961 the
number
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of rented
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accommodation
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dropped by 10%, which is the same amount
in
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which the
owned
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number of owned
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accommodation
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increased. In 1971, both types of
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where
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were
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split equally, 50% each,
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in the next ten
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years
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the rented
households
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rose steadily by 10% to 60%. Between 1981 and 2001 the
number
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owned
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of owned
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accommodation
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went down to just above 20%.
Finally
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,
at the end
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of the period, the
number
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of owned
households
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rose by 5% to approximately 36%, with a drop in rented
accommodation
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to 64%.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, households, number, accommodation with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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