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The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The picture depicts the total number of visitors to The national
museum
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 every five years starting from 1980 to 2015. The Louvre
Museum
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 excelled by increasing gradually
while
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 the London Science
Museum
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 decreased gradually and reached the bottom place. Not only The London Science
Museum
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 but
also
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 The Shenzhen
Museum
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 had lower enthusiasts in 1980 with The number of people were 4
million
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 and 5
million
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 respectively. Surprisingly, there was a huge escalation in 2015 showing the number of visitors that came to The Vatican
Museum
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 was up to 8,7
million
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 (close to The Louvre's).
Moreover
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, there was a big gap between The Vatican
Museum
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's guests and The Shenzhen
Museum
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's guests in 2015 which was nearly 5
million
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 people differentiation.
In contrast
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, in 1980 the deviation between these two museums was lower than 1
million
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • visitor numbers
  • trend analysis
  • stability
  • popularity
  • significant changes
  • peak periods
  • low points
  • global tourism trends
  • economic downturns
  • natural disasters
  • tourist patterns
  • dynamic nature
  • factors influencing
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