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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates
amount
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the amount
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 of chicken,
beef
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, lamb and fish that
consumed
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are consumed
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 weekly by people in European countries over a period of 25 years.
Overall
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, the biggest rise can be observed in
consumption
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the consumption
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 of chicken and the biggest downgrade - in
beef
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. Eating fish just
slight
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slightly
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 slumped,
while
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 using lamb downgraded noticeably. Starting with
beef
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,
it
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apply
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started
journey
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its journey
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 with 220
grams
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 per week in 1979, after a slight downgrade, it
rised up
Verb problem
rose
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 to 240
grams
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. But it was the highest rank, that it reached. After,
using
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the use of
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beef
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 started
fall
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to fall
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 steadily and ended up
with
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at
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 100
grams
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 in 2004.
Same
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The same
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can be seen
Verb problem
apply
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direction can be seen in
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the directions
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directions
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direction
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 of
lamb
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the lamb
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. From 1979 to 2004, it only declined gradually. The opposing direction of
this
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lines
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line
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 is drawn in the consumption of chickens.
Although
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 there was a slight decline over a period of time, there was eventually a noticeable increase, starting from 150
grams
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 and ending at almost 250
grams
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. Fish consumption decreased only slightly from 60
grams
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 to 50
grams
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words beef, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • metric tons
  • fluctuations
  • upward/downward trend
  • stabilize
  • peak
  • trough
  • overtake
  • steady decline/increase
  • sustainable
  • dietary habits
  • preferences
  • health consciousness
  • per capita
  • poultry
  • veal
  • stagnant
  • gradual
  • surpass
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