The charts below give information about children under 18learjing musical instruments in one region of the UK in 1996 and 2016.

The charts below give information about children under 18learjing musical instruments in one region of the UK in 1996 and 2016.
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The pie charts show information about the proportion of
children
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learning to play a musical
instrument
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in the years 1996 and 2016,
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the accompanying bar chart demonstrates
children
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's choice of musical
instruments
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in the same years. More than half of the
children
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surveyed (56%) were not involved in learning to play a musical
instrument
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in 1996.
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figure,
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, had more than halved by 2016 thanks to a growing interest in
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activity, with the percentage of those attending music lessons accounting for a hefty 76% of the total. As far as the
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choice is concerned, in four out of seven categories, the proportions declined. Piano, being opted for by the largest percentage of
children
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in 1996, at 30%, saw a 5% decline after two decades.
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the figures for violin and acoustic guitar categories fell by around 4% to just under 15 and around 2 per cent, the 'other'
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' decrease in percentage was minimal: only by 1% to reach roughly 2.5%. The remaining
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in question,
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, showed different patterns of change. Keyboard, after an 8% growth, reached dominance in 2016 with 30%. Electric guitar was another category with a rise from about 13% to virtually 17%, but the proportion of
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playing at least 1
instrument
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remained constant, at more or less 12%.
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, the pie charts make it clear that the interest in learning how to play a musical
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grew substantially over the period, with the overwhelming majority of
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being engaged in
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in 2016. As regards the bar chart, piano and keyboard were the most popular
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in 1996 and 2016 respectively,
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to 'other'
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and the acoustic guitar.
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