The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar graph illustrates the proportion of Australian
people
who did regular physical exercise
in 2010, analyzing in terms of gender and age
group.
Overall
, the percentage of people
doing exercise
are very similar. Another significant feature is that women
do more exercise
than men
in all age
ranges, except for those below 24 and 65 or over.
After 35 years old, male the older they got, the more exercise
they did, in the age
ranges 35 to 44, 45 to 54 and 55 to 64, the proportion of people
who did exercise
were 39.5%, 43.1% and 45.1% respectively. While
the number
of female
doing Fix the agreement mistake
females
exercise
in these same age
ranges remained relatively stable, between 52.5% and 53.3%.
The only age
range in which men
did more exercise
than women
,
are the one from 15 to 24; 52.8% of Remove the comma
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men
did exercise
while
only 47.7% of women
did physical activity, in the next age
range, the number
of male who did activity dropped dramatically by 10.6% while
the number
of women
increased moderately to 48.9%. Finally
, the number
of people
in the oldest age
range who did exercise
were
similar in both genders; 46.7% of Correct subject-verb agreement
was
men
and 47.1% of women
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