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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features，and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features，and make comparisons where relevant.
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The above picture depicts the changes
of
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in
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 the
amount
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number
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 of visitors
in
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to
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 a Caribbean
island
 from 2010 to 2017. It is evident that the
tourists
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number of tourists
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 are growing in a comparatively dramatic trend in general. Among
visitor
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visitors
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, the
island
 is much preferable compared with
cruise
ships
 during most years.
However
,
it
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this
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 is not always the case.
Cruise
ships
 have attracted more and more guests since 2012. In 2010, the majority of the tourists
are
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were
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 likely to stay on the
island
 and only almost 0.25 million people
choose
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chose
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the
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apply
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cruise
ships
.
However
,
cruise
ships
are become
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become
became
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 popular after 2012 with the
amount
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number
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 of visitors even
surpassed
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surpassing
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island
 fans in June 2015.
And in
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In
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 2016, the population
even
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apply
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reached
to
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apply
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1.5 million which is
also
 the peak of
island
 guests in the past seven years. The people who prefer
island
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the island
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 are comparatively stable and kept a figure of 1.5 million population in four years. All in all, the
overall
tourists
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number of tourists
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 are still growing and the
Cruise
ships
is
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are
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 likely to be the trend.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, cruise, ships with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • gradual increase
  • sharp decline
  • steady growth
  • plateau
  • seasonal variation
  • external influences
  • tourist influx
  • sustainable tourism
  • economic impact
  • hospitality industry
  • travel restrictions
  • visitor statistics
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