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The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pictures below compare the centre of a town now and after its development.
Overall
, there will be a big change in
all
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the town, mainly in the central
area
 of the map, new areas and new roads will be developed. The Main road will be changed so only pedestrians can pass through it and all the central
area
 will be
surounded
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surrounded
 by a dual carriageway.
School
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The school
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 and Housing
area
 in the south of the map will remain the same. Inside the dual carriageway, in front of the school, there will be a housing
area
.
Moreover
, the park will be smaller than it is now, and on its left side, a new housing
area
 will be developed. The shops below the main road will remain the same,
while
 the ones
at
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in
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 the north will be changed to different areas. In the left
corner
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corner,
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 there will be a bus station, and on its
right hand
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right-hand
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 side, next to it, there will be a shopping
center
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centre
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 and a car park.
Finally
, there will be a road from the east side of the dual carriageway that leads to a new housing
area
.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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