The chart below shows the average money spent per costumer on various types of equipment in a Canadian sports store
The line graph shows how much money people who
lives
in Canada have been spending their money between 2000 and 2020 Change the verb form
live
with
four different sports. The database for average is in local money from 0 dollars to 80 dollars. In general, in 2010 all sports had a big Change preposition
on
changed
in their activities.
Football had a great increase after 2010, because before between 2000 and Replace the word
change
2010
it had a slight decrease from $60 to $40, Add a comma
2010,
however
, aftter
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after
this
period it had a sharp increase and in
5 Change preposition
apply
years
later it got back the
same position of Change preposition
to the
origen
. Correct your spelling
origin
In addition
, in 2020 it crossed the margen
Correct your spelling
margin
60
dollars and almost Change preposition
of 60
got
the high database. Another sport that had a good rise is swimming, it started Verb problem
reached
with
a little bit over Change preposition
at
than
$10 and over the Change preposition
apply
years
it got up finished in
Change preposition
at
approximalety
$30, Correct your spelling
approximately
moreover
, it had a gradual increase without downs or breaks.
Althought
, sports Correct your spelling
Although
as
tennis and rugby got down. Rugby had a nice Correct quantifier usage
such as
moviment
in the Correct your spelling
movement
moment
firts
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first
years
, specially
before 2010Replace the word
especially
,
when it Remove the comma
apply
was rising
from $40 in 2000 to $60 in 2010, Wrong verb form
rose
therefore
, it had a sharp decrease and 5 years
later it moved back to the begin
with $40, and in 2020 it fell to almost $30. Tennis is the same situation, Replace the word
beginning
however
it just had a decrease, Add a comma
however,
staring
with a little bit more than $20 and Correct your spelling
starting
ended
Wrong verb form
ending
with
almost $10 in 2020.Change preposition
at
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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