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The climograph below shows average monthly temperatures and rainfall in the city of Kolkata. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about the average monthly temperatures and
rainfall
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 in the city of Kolkata.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the highest temperatures occur from April to
June
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,
while
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 the heaviest
rainfall
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 occurs from
June
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 to
September
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. About temperature, it begins at around 20
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 in January and increases gradually to over 30
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 in May. After that, the temperature slightly decreases above 25
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 from
June
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 to
September
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 and significantly drops to around 20
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 in December. Precipitation stays very low from January to April,
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 nearly 50mm each month. Surprisingly,
rainfall
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 rises in May to
September
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, peaks in July and August, and both months have nearly 350mm of rain. After that, the amount of
rainfall
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 decreases quickly to about 300mm from October to December.
As a result
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, Kolkata has a hot climate throughout the year, and a rainy season between
June
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 and
September
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. Dried seasons from November to March

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Include more specific data points to back up your claims about temperature and rainfall.
coherence
Make sure to link your ideas more smoothly to improve flow, especially between sections.
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Consider adding a brief explanation of what a climograph is in the introduction for clarity.
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Incorporate transition words like 'however' or 'in contrast' to guide the reader through your points.
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You provided a clear overview of temperature patterns and rainfall, which is a strong aspect of your response.
coherence
Your essay follows a logical structure with a definite introduction, body, and conclusion.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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