In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some say that funds should

be spend

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be spent

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for

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constructing new

railways

and fast

trains

between different regions,

while

others would argue that funds should be used for existing public

transport

This

essay will argue that

although

improving existing public

transport

can connect different parts of a city,

people

can get to other

places

quicker with fast

trains

and

railways

. On the one hand, improving public

transport

allows

people

to get to more

places

This

is because there are individuals who do not have

driving

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license, so the only option they have is to use public

transports

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transport

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. In some nations, it is difficult to get to the countryside by public

transport

or using Uber and Cabify, so

better

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public

transport

people

will be able to move easily inside the city.

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, in many Spanish

countrysides

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, there

are

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no public

transport

or only

few

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a few

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of them every day,

this

make

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it difficult for

people

to get to other

places

However

, I believe constructing new

railways

can

also

solve

this

problem.

On the other hand

, constructing new

railways

and fast

trains

between cities, allow

people

to get to their destination quicker. So the time that

people

spend

for

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travelling will reduce and efficiency

increases

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will increase

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This

will lead to economic benefits as businesses

would

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have greater access to markets.

Also

, nowadays many

people

are working in

places

far away from their family,

the

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construction of fast

trains

allow

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these

people

to be with their family.

For instance

, there are many fast

trains

between Chinese cities, in

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normal public

transport

, it takes around 4 hours to travel from Shenzhen to

Hongkong

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Hong Kong

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, but with fast

trains

, it only

need

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approximately 30 minutes. In my opinion,

this

point of view is preferable because

people

do not need to waste long journeys

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travelling. In conclusion,

although

public

transport

can connect

places

around cities, new railway lines and fast

trains

reduce the time spent

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travelling, and

this

is why, is better to construct new railway lines and fast

trains

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8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

334 words

4.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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