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Students in university should be specialized in one subject rather than to develop a wider range of knowledge in many different subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people may hold the opinion that college students are better trained in a particular subject
instead
 of mastering various disciplines with exclusive knowledge. I’m strongly against
this
 view. First and foremost, mono-knowledge is not applicable in the real world. In the workplace, the employer appreciates people with
multi-knowledge
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 in several areas.
For instance
, the requirements for recruiting a teaching assistant in
a
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 institution are diverse, including teaching skills, efficiency of administrative work, communication skills, and even managing abilities. In an elementary school, the professors are multi-skills as well. An English teacher should
also
 have
certain
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 knowledge of Chinese since languages are highly connected with each other. A specialist in chemicals may
also
 participate in the training of mathematics.
Besides
, the master of multiple knowledge in versatile subjects is favourable for our growth and development. In
this
 day and age, we are facing new challenges and opportunities. Single-subject learning is outdated to some degree, for the majority of us may not focus on a single area for the rest of our lives.
For example
, a large number of teachers altered their career path to overseas sales and Youtubers in the past few years because of the policy and limitations announced by the government.
Furthermore
, when it comes to a new environment, a wider range of skills enable us to live better in the future. All in all, focusing on a preferred and compulsory subject is crucial, but all-round learning should not be neglected in any case.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

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  • Summary
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Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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