You rent an apartment and you are quite happy with it but you want to suggest a renovation. Write a letter about your suggestion. In your letter, you should tell: - Your appreciation of current condition - What is the renovation and why? - What is the benefits of your suggestion?
I am writing a request for improvement in your
house
.
Since I looked your
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at your
house
I felt great that there is more space in your flat. Besides
this
, the small garden and garage is
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are
also
providing
for tenants. The unique style of your Wrong verb form
provided
house
is
attracted many tenants. The Verb problem
has
house
is quintessential one bedroom and washroom but your flat has given two bedroom
and Change to a plural noun
bedrooms
kitchen
. The ventilation system Correct article usage
a kitchen
is
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also
impressed me and my family.
However
, the problem in your house
is water
and gas
system because when we use water
tank it is empty. We are Correct article usage
a water
living
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leaving
six
members and it is not enough of Change preposition
with six
small
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a small
water
tank for us. Although
, the gas pressure is low in the winter season and it is difficult to use hot Correct word choice
However
water
. Furthermore
, my chlidren
felt sick Correct your spelling
children
due to
cold
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the cold
water
in
these days because there is no geyser here. These issues should be resolved Change preposition
apply
otherwise
we cannot live for longer in your apartment.
I would like to suggest you to
rectify these problems because of the maintenance of your Remove the particle
apply
house
as well as
your house
demand will increase in the future.
I am looking forward to hearing you again.
Yours Sincerely,Submitted by mobinadurrani43 on
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph presents a clear main idea and the ideas within each paragraph are logically ordered and linked. Use cohesive devices effectively to create cohesion throughout your letter.
coherence cohesion
Open your letter with a formal greeting and close it appropriately. Use "Dear [Landlord's Name]," and end with "Yours faithfully," or "Yours sincerely," followed by your full name.
task achievement
Clearly state your purpose from the beginning, explain the situation comprehensively, and make sure your suggestions for renovation are specific, clear, and directly related to your purpose of writing.
task achievement
Maintain a polite and professional tone throughout the letter. Despite discussing issues, ensure your language reflects respect and consideration for the landlord.
The Greeting
Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.
Always start an informal letter in the ways:
- Dear + name
- Hi / Hello + name
‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.
For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:
- Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
- Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.