The charts below show the average temperatures in 12 months in three cities and how many hours of sunshine these cities have in a year.

The charts below show the average temperatures in 12 months in three cities and how many hours of sunshine these cities have in a year.
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The diagrams illustrate the average temperatures in every month of
year
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the year
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in three cities and how many hours of sunshine these cities have in a year.
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it is very noticeable that New York has
very
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a very
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big amount of hours of sunshine,
during
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while
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London has half of
Sydneys's
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Sydney's
time. As we can see, for cities except Sydney summer
monthes
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months
gave them
such
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a huge advantage and increased their time to the peak at 30
hour
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hours
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.
As well as
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London which has
an
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gradual increase from January to Juli and
similarli
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similarly
has a decrease from August to December. It is undeniable that Sydeney's pagodas
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are wierd
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wierd
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weird
to compare others, as their process
exactly
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is exactly
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oppositely. In conclusion,
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