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You recently organised an all- day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter, - Say what the participants liked about the hotel - Explain why they were unhappy about the food - Suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in future

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Dear Manager, I am writing
this
 letter to provide you feedback about the function attended in your hotel
last
sunday
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Sunday
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. Being a supervisor in Seasia Infotech I was accountable for all the meeting arrangements. There is no iota of doubt about the infrastructure and service department of your hotel.
In addition
 to
this
, the ambience of
this
 place was really admiring which make It one of the
succesfull
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successful
 meetings. But my
collegues
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colleagues
 have raised a concern regarding the quality and variety of food. As per
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the contract
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contract
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contract,
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 I have paid for three types of food
that is
 vegetarian,
non- vegetarian
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non-vegetarian
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 and vegan. I noticed veg and non-veg were equally served
however
 there was
shortage
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a shortage
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 of vegan
meal
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meals
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.
Also
, some of the vegan salads have milky cream which was really
disappointed
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. I suggest you
to
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keep track of your menu list to make sure about the food quality which not only retains the interest of your customer in
this
 hotel but
also
 increases the rating online.
Apart from
this
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this,
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 our client was so happy with the environment provided for
official
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the official
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 meeting. Yours sincerely, Navdeep Kaur
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coherence cohesion
Ensure paragraphing is clear with one central idea per paragraph and appropriate use of linking words.
coherence cohesion
Avoid run-on sentences. Instead, construct well-developed, clearly structured sentences that accurately reflect the writer's intent.
task achievement
Cover all parts of the task sufficiently, providing specific, relevant details wherever necessary.
task achievement
Include a closing salutation that matches the formal tone of the letter and ensure consistency in the tone throughout.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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