The bar chart below illustrates the amount of time spent on various leisure activities by men and women in a given town in 2019.

The bar chart below illustrates the amount of time spent on various leisure activities by men and women in a given town in 2019.
The bar chart indicates how much
time
men and women spent on numerous pastime activities in a town in 2019. Generally, it is clearly seen that the most preferred holiday activity was reading
books
by Chinese
tourists
,
however
, they did not tend to visit
places
for recreation.
To begin
with, the number of
hours
spent on visiting
places
by Chinese
tourists
accounted for just one
while
time
spent reading
books
reached a peak of 8
hours
in 2019. Regarding visiting the
beach
as a leisure activity in a town, it comprised 3
hours
during the year. With regards to the amount of
time
spent on reading
books
by American
tourists
was half of the total
hours
, and following, visiting
places
and spending
time
at the
beach
was 5
hours
and 3
hours
with the respective.
However
, Brazilian
tourists
were interested in visiting the
beach
and spent 6
hours
while
the number of
hours
spent on reading
books
and visiting
places
was half of the total
hours
and 2
hours
, respectively.
On the other hand
, Turkish
tourists
experienced modest
hours
by reading
books
for just 5
hours
, and other activities (at the
beach
, visiting
places
) accounted for 4
hours
and 3
hours
, respectively.
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