The bar chart below illustrates the amount of time spent on various leisure activities by men and women in a given town in 2019.
The bar chart indicates how much
time
men and women spent on numerous pastime activities in a town in 2019.
Generally, it is clearly seen that the most preferred holiday activity was reading books
by Chinese tourists
, however
, they did not tend to visit places
for recreation.
To begin
with, the number of hours
spent on visiting places
by Chinese tourists
accounted for just one while
time
spent reading books
reached a peak of 8 hours
in 2019. Regarding visiting the beach
as a leisure activity in a town, it comprised 3 hours
during the year.
With regards to the amount of time
spent on reading books
by American tourists
was half of the total hours
, and following, visiting places
and spending time
at the beach
was 5 hours
and 3 hours
with the respective. However
, Brazilian tourists
were interested in visiting the beach
and spent 6 hours
while
the number of hours
spent on reading books
and visiting places
was half of the total hours
and 2 hours
, respectively.
On the other hand
, Turkish tourists
experienced modest hours
by reading books
for just 5 hours
, and other activities (at the beach
, visiting places
) accounted for 4 hours
and 3 hours
, respectively.Submitted by yusifakhmad on
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