You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The line graph depicts a comparison between female
graduates
and male
graduates
who
pass
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passed
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from a
university
in
Canada
from 1992 until 2007.
Overall
, the
quantity
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number
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of female
graduates
from
the
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apply
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university
in
Canada
significantly rose,
on the other hand
, Males who graduated from
university
increased slightly in that period.
In
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From
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1992 until 1995 the number of
graduates
both female and male in The
University
in
Canada
rose
slight
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slightly
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from
bellow
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below
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100,000
graduates
to over 100,000 for female
graduates
and for
male
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males
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starting from 70,000
graduates
to just under 80,000
graduates
.
However
, in the next
periode
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period
(around 1995 to 1999) the amount of
graduates
(female and male)
decrease
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decreased
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slightly by around 5,000 (female
graduates
) and around 7,000 (male
graduates
).
In
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From
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2000 until 2006, the
mount
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amount
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of female
graduates
from
university
in
Canada
rose dramatically from over 100,000 and reached a peak
just
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of just
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under 150,000
graduated
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graduates
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in 2006.
While
, The number of male
graduates
unstable
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was unstable
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between 1999
until
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and
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2001, Starting from 2002 until 2006, the
amount
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number
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of male
graduates
remarkable
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remarkably
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rose by 17,000 male
graduates
and reached a peak in 2006.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, university, canada with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuate
  • notable
  • graduate numbers
  • gender disparity
  • rise
  • decline
  • peak
  • period
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • significant
  • overview
  • comparison
  • socio-economic
  • educational policies
  • cultural shifts
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