Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?.
In today's
economy
more and more Add a comma
economy,
people
are choosing to Use synonyms
work
for themselves and be Use synonyms
self- employed
Correct your spelling
self-employed
instead
of being an employee as they want a more flexible Linking Words
life -
Correct your spelling
life-work
work
balance ,but Use synonyms
this
could lead to some obstacles which they would need to overcome in order to be successful.
Linking Words
Firstly
, Linking Words
people
who Use synonyms
owned
their own Wrong verb form
own
Use synonyms
business
have more Fix the agreement mistake
businesses
chance
to get choices Fix the agreement mistake
chances
rather
than Rephrase
apply
who
Correct pronoun usage
those who
work
for others.Use synonyms
This
is because when individuals Linking Words
work
for others ,they have to Use synonyms
follows
their rules but if they are self - Change the verb
follow
employee
they can do their Fix the agreement mistake
employees
business
as want as they want .Use synonyms
For example
, the owner can close their Linking Words
business
,Use synonyms
can
take a break or even Verb problem
apply
can
expand their own Verb problem
apply
business
when they want at any time.Use synonyms
Furthermore
,non- staff person are they have more time to do Linking Words
the
Correct article usage
apply
others
activities Change noun form
other's
others'
while
they can manage their Linking Words
working life
balance.
Add a hyphen
working-life
Secondly
, freelance Linking Words
business
Use synonyms
people
are more high Use synonyms
risks
taking person.Taking Use synonyms
risks
like Use synonyms
this
Linking Words
it
can cost Correct pronoun usage
apply
people
Use synonyms
considerable
amount of money because they have to invest a lot of money Add an article
a considerable
on
their Change preposition
in
business
.Use synonyms
Some time
it can Replace the word
Sometimes
lead to resulting
in debt and can Wrong verb form
result
also
put a lot of strain on their families or other Linking Words
relationship
.Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
In addition
, that kind of Linking Words
Use synonyms
risks
Fix the agreement mistake
risk
are
indeed stressful because they can lose everything if they Change the verb form
is
difficulties
Add a missing verb
have difficulties
to deal
with their problems.Change the verb form
dealing
Linking Words
Also
it can lead to Add a comma
Also,
mentally troubled
as well.
In conclusion,individuals Replace the word
mental trouble
more
and more trying to become Add a missing verb
are more
a
Remove the article
apply
self- employment
because they can manage their working life and freedom to Correct your spelling
self-employment
work
at Use synonyms
anytime
.Replace the word
any time
However
, they should consider Linking Words
about
the high Change preposition
apply
risks
as well and should prepare for that challenge Use synonyms
how
to overcome Correct word choice
and how
with
Change preposition
apply
that
obstacles.Correct determiner usage
those
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...