The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Nowadays, it is commonly thought that it is essential to enhance
people
's life with help
of Correct article usage
the help
science
. I completely agree that science
can bring a lot off
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of
advantanges
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advantages
such
as tackling environmental issues as well as
to improve
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improving
human's
welfare.
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human
Fist
of all, Correct your spelling
First
science
plays a vital role in solving environmental problems. It is to be outlined that with help
of scientific discoveries there are several ways Correct article usage
the help
such
as combating
climate change, Wrong verb form
combat
furthermore
, reduce
the amount of carbon dioxide may be Wrong verb form
reducing
the
excellent Correct article usage
an
examples
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example
about
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of
benefits
of Correct article usage
the benefits
science
. For instance
, scientists may discover some new ways that might
prevent Verb problem
apply
extinction
of endangered species. Add an article
the extinction
Thus
, science
is a signifiant
factor Correct your spelling
significant
the
enable world to become better.
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in the
Secondly
, It is
has a huge impact on Verb problem
it
people
's welfare. Moreover
, science
plays a major role in medicine and it allows people
to prevent some disease
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diseases
as well as
combat viruses. As an illustration, there are several vaccines and antibiotics that may be beneficial to prevent illnesses and contribute to the treatment of diseases. In addition
, many people
have tendency
to make use of painkillers that may reduce their severe pain Add an article
a tendency
the tendency
as well as
utilising some vitamins that will be advantageous for nutrients as well as
for blood circulation. Hence
, sciience
is Correct your spelling
science
indispensable
part of our Add an article
an indispensable
life
and it brings Fix the agreement mistake
lives
range
of benefits to Add an article
a range
individual’s
health.
In conclusion, there is a strong correlation between Correct article usage
an individual’s
science
and human's
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human
well being
and I strongly believe that without Add a hyphen
well-being
science
we could not achieve the benefitial
solutions that may occur in terms of medical issues and Correct your spelling
beneficial
envirenmental
problems.Correct your spelling
environmental
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