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The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays, it is commonly thought that it is essential to enhance
people
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's life with
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 of
science
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. I completely agree that
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 can bring a lot
off
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of
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advantanges
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advantages
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 as tackling environmental issues
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to improve
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improving
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human's
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human
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 welfare.
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 of all,
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 plays a vital role in solving environmental problems. It is to be outlined that with
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 of scientific discoveries there are several ways
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 as
combating
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combat
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 climate change,
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,
reduce
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 the amount of carbon dioxide may be
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an
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about
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benefits
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the benefits
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 of
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.
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, scientists may discover some new ways that
might
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prevent
extinction
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the extinction
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 of endangered species.
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,
science
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 is a
signifiant
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significant
 factor
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 enable world to become better.
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,
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 has a huge impact on
people
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's welfare.
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,
science
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 plays a major role in medicine and it allows
people
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 to prevent some
disease
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as well as
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 combat viruses. As an illustration, there are several vaccines and antibiotics that may be beneficial to prevent illnesses and contribute to the treatment of diseases.
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, many
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 have
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 to make use of painkillers that may reduce their severe pain
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 utilising some vitamins that will be advantageous for nutrients
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 for blood circulation.
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,
sciience
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science
 is
indispensable
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an indispensable
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 part of our
life
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lives
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 and it brings
range
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a range
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 of benefits to
individual’s
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an individual’s
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 health. In conclusion, there is a strong correlation between
science
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 and
human's
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human
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well being
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well-being
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 and I strongly believe that without
science
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 we could not achieve the
benefitial
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beneficial
 solutions that may occur in terms of medical issues and
envirenmental
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environmental
 problems.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • technological advancements
  • medical discoveries
  • life-changing inventions
  • innovations
  • solutions to human problems
  • enhancing quality of life
  • improvement of healthcare
  • transportation
  • communication
  • agriculture
  • energy sectors
  • eradication of diseases
  • prolongation of life expectancy
  • global challenges
  • climate change
  • overpopulation
  • food security
  • developed world
  • underprivileged communities
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