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line graph give number of the arrest per year

line graph give number of the arrest per year
In 1991 the
number
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 of
arrest
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arrests
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 for illegal drugs stood at 10.
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, during
3 years
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the 3-year
 period, there was a sharp increase to about 22 per year. The
number
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then
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 dramatically increased to 60 in 1995 and remained constant
in
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for
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period
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a period
the period
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 of 2 years.
In
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From
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 1997 to 1999 they plunged to 40 after that
rate
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the rate
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 of
arests
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increase
 was followed by a sudden increase and peaked at 70. Next year, the
number
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 fell sharply and count
approximetaly
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approximately
 15%. The
number
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then
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 rose significantly to around 55%
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then
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than
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 in 2002 to 2005 saw
flactuation
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fluctuation
fluctuations
 in the
arest
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arrest
rest
 rate, that
account
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accounts
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 40
at the end
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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